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Post by Lothiel on Mar 2, 2004 16:10:36 GMT
Well, I got brave yesterday and decided to attempt to write a poem in Sindarin (not write it in English then translate).... And I even got it to rhyme! I'm so happy! lol Glîr lín luitha nin A Ithil vi venel. Glithiach ah-elenath Radad athravenel. Telegain ú-gennen linnad 'lîr allen; Ai glithiad luithad athravenel vain! Rough Translation: Your song enchants me Oh Moon in the sky. You dance with the starry host finding a way across the sky. Harpers unseen singing songs for you; Oh dancing enchanting across the fair sky! [modified to fix grammatical errors.. ]
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Post by Linithiel on Mar 2, 2004 18:10:50 GMT
This looks great, Loey! Well done for the rhyming! Just a few comments/suggestions: Glîr lín luitha nin (should this maybe be "nin luitha"?)Hmm, usually I would have said "nin luitha", but the "nin" and "lin" straight after each other feels a little strange, so I'd leave it as it is. "Ai" is what Legolas says when he sees the Balrog, and I don't think that's that same kind of feeling you want to be conveying when seeing the moon, so I'd suggest using "A", like in "A Elbereth Gilthoniel" Telegain ú-cennenWouldn't that mutate to "ú-gennen"? "Vi i venel" feels a bit clumsy with all those "i"'s, so maybe just "vi menel" (hmm does vi cause mutation...?) ... (or can we make vi + i = vin?) Hmm, not sure about that one Hope this helps - it's a great poem!
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Post by Lothiel on Mar 2, 2004 18:18:31 GMT
As far as I'm aware, 'vi' does not cause lenition. D'oh! I totally spaced that out! BTW, it's so great that we can all help each other learn like this. Very cool!
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Post by Gwendeth on Mar 13, 2004 15:00:47 GMT
Lo - you are right - 'vi' (probably 'mi') does NOT cause lenition that anyone is aware of.
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Post by Brannwen on Mar 20, 2004 0:33:10 GMT
that's awesome Loey!!
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Post by Lothiel on Mar 20, 2004 4:30:57 GMT
Thanks Bran!
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